I present a short poem written while distracted in class.
The sun was shining
Shining and the sky was blue
I was walking down the street
And the sun illuminated me and you
Things were looking up
And I had great things to do
Until those damn rainclouds ruined our view
As a spelling nazi, i demand that you spell "distracted" correctly. ;-)
However, I love the poem.
Ahh indeed! You may see more spelling mistakes in the next few days since my iBook keyboard is malfunctioning. A replacement keyboard part has been ordered.
Yes you heard me correctly, I am blaming the hardware for my lack of proofreading. It's a great scapegoat.
*didn't know that 'distracted' was spelled incorrectly*
hrm.
ANYWAY! I like the poem. What would it be like if you replaced "until" with "but?" You think it would change the meaning? Like if you said until, it sounds like your good time ended. If you say but, it seems like your good times continued...but those "damn rainclouds" just got in the way :)
It was spelled wrong until I corrected it ;-).
Concerning the word 'until' instead of 'but', I originally had 'but' in there, but I changed it to until. I also had 'my' instead of 'our' in the last line. You are right, it does change the meaning quite a bit.